大家帮忙看看这两种英语写法哪种更好些？

mominglily

以下两句英文差不多表达相同的内容，请各位大侠帮忙看看，
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1. Thus, much more accurate tools for prediction of developmental toxicity of drug candidates need to be developed, in order to provide comprehensive guidelines for medical professionals in clinical application. ! q( ?4 r0 s4 h5 u: P; G( a
2. Thus, there is a pressing need to develop more accurate tools for predicting developmental toxicity in drug candidates, not only to produce safer medicines, but also to provide doctors and patients with comprehensive guidelines for using a medicine safely and effectively.

naturalkillerce

个人觉得第二种翻译不错，更加体现开发工具的急迫性和重要性。

sunjianhua2000

第二种好，逻辑性表达清楚

naturalkillerce

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第二种也更符合外国人的写作习惯。第一种有些中国式的翻译了。